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Crystal Said:

Wow very difficult...please look, experienced web programmer needed for this!?!?

We Answered:

you should use mysql as a database.. and use php scripting, that will be the best combination for this kinda website.. if you are new to php then www.php.net is the greatestest help....
i hope this would have helped you.
Cheers

Franklin Said:

BCIS....EXCEL ASSIGNMANT....10 points to answer?

We Answered:

Excel?? Or Access? Sounds like access.
But what is the question??
You didn't want someone to do it did you?
What would you have learned? Only you will be there at the job.
If you have a problem, ask for help on that issue.
Doing homework is CHEATING YOURSELF

Marcia Said:

Can you tell me what you think of my writing?

We Answered:

I'm not going to lie and tell you it's fantastic. It has it downfalls and I assume you want to know them.

You captured my attention from the first to third paragraph. After that, I got confused by the layout of the sentences and the sentences themselves. A few sentences later, I grew bored and skimmed the rest of your passage,

Now, ways I think your story passage could be improved--
1) Many sentences were awkward in arrangement and have far too many words.
EX-I am going to kill Damien Silver.
The way he looks at people, the way he walks, even way he breathes screams at everyone ‘I’m better than you!’. Damien is an insufferable know-it-all, who I can’t stand, and I have a high threshold for idiots. Killing Damien Silver, the school smart-****, the boy who thinks he’s superior to the rest of us, the boy who drives anyone who tries to get close to him as far away as they can possibly get from him, appears to be the only option.

It is obvious from the first sentences that the main character despises this Damien fellow.

Now, I feel that this passage would sound better if you organized the ideas better maybe like this.

I am going to kill Damien Silver.

Just the way he breathes screams, "I think I'm better than you!". Just the way he walks makes me shake with fury!

Oh, and the way he examines us, like we're lab rats, makes me want to roar!

But, What can I say about Damien!?

Damien is an insufferable know-it-all, the school smart a**. In fact, I don't think I can stand his _____ any longer and I have a high threshold for idiots.

Ahhhh, Damien thinks he's so superior to the rest of us. He drives anyone trying to get close as far away as possible.

Now, Don't you see that ending his sorry existence is the only way?

You know, add your own spin into your story and try to make the telling as smooth as possible. *****Use wordiness and take out words you don't need.*****

2) Always add flavorful words to add an interest to you story. You don't want to use boring words like sat, frowned..etc. But from the first few paragraphs it seems like you have a decent vocab. =)

3) Always try to improve your work, and reread to find any mistakes. I found a handful of typos.

4) Add emotion to your work. Picture someone you can't stand, and write your feelings about them.

Hope I helped! I'd be interested to read this passage after you went through and revised it a few times. Now, I don't know all that much, I'm only 15, but I think that by following those lines your passage would be greatly improved.

Brandon Said:

What is the best way to get senior citizens involved in my quote project?

We Answered:

Hi Jennifer... While I can see merit in your 'project', the problem I foresee is that I, and most seniors I am aware of, would not wish to post a 'video on u tube'. (privacy would surely be lost) Anonymity becomes impossible to achieve.
Don't give up on your 'project' yet; more thinking and planning appear necessary.

Elsie Said:

Learning to play the guitar?

We Answered:

You posted in the right place. My website has free video guitar lessons that teach you practice riffs specifically designed to go over essential techniques. The best part: It's all free!

http://codeshredlessons.com/

Ken Said:

Is this a good resume for a Customer Service Position?

We Answered:

Very good resume in general. However if I'm gonna be too observant... since your time as Childcare Assistant was in the past, you have to put your verbs in past tense (worked, gave, cleaned, cared/provided).

Also, putting your GPA is not mandatory unless you're asked to, or if you're seeking a career job and you want to impress employers with your marks. I'm guessing this isn't a career search, but a general job search? If so, I don't see the point. But you can still keep it you really want to.

All the best!

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