Helen Said:

Review my College Essay PLEASE...?

We Answered:

Well the first thing is, don't say i learned at the beginning of every sentence. And I wouldn't say it hurts when doctor’s try to stab an IV into your arm, I would say it hurts when the doctors stick an IV needle in your arm. But other than that your collage paper is AMAZING! Man it is super good. I know how it is to be in the hospital because in 3rd grade I had to get surgery on my appendix. And that was a rough time. Anyway I hope this helps!!!