Roland Said:

I need some one to proofread my essay?

We Answered:

While I would encourage you to set ambitious goals for yourself, I also think that it is important for you to understand that your goals should match your talents, otherwise, you will be disappointed as you will inevitably fail.

So, for starters, if you are just graduating high school what you should be thinking about is not so much about your career as a Ph.D lecturer at an Ivy League college but about where your interests and talents really are.

If you are destined to become a history academic, then that will result from your passion for history and your interest in history. You will naturally study those things and if you are good at history, you will be recognized by your teachers with good grades and good recommendations, and that in turn will get you into great schools, and that in turn will open opportunities for you. And eventually, maybe you will in fact wind up with a PhD in history and a successful academic career.

But equally likely, you may come to realize that history is not what really lights you on fire - something else does.

You are too young to know and too inexperienced to know what it is you are likely to be doing ten years in the future.

For what its worth, your essay is full of poor grammar, which is an indication of a poor education. You may not have a lot of options at the local school, but by reading on your own, you can certainly improve your writing skills, and that would be my first and strongest recommendation. Start reading and find a mentor, someone who can help you figure out if history is really what you want to devote your life to.

Lets look at your first paragraph:

"One of my personal goals is to become the first documented

{ misuse of the word documented; since you either are or are not the first person in your family to get a ...etc}

person in my family to obtain a Doctorate of Philosophy degree in History. Being a respected history professor has been a dream of mine ever since I was a small child

{That really sounds odd - since it places the focus on being respected for a professional role rather than on the passion for history that is the pre-requisite to success in that role}.

Growing up in a small town such as Woodville, Mississippi becoming a doctor in anything was the fantasy of most pre adolescence children, but as reality struck most of them they soon changed they

{you mean 'their', using 'they' is only correct if you are speaking eubonics or rapping}

mind. "I can't see my self going to school for about 8 years after high school is a statement I often hear when I tell my peers of my post secondary plans. Despite the negative criticism I receive from my peers and others I know I can achieve my goal if I work diligently and whole heartily at.

{'whole heartedly' is the correct way of saying that; heartily would be correct in the following sentence: He ate his soup heartily. Also, ending the sentence with 'at' is poor form if not downright in error.

Your next paragraph, is actually embarrassing. I offer by criticism sincerely, because someone has to tell you the truth here.

After during

{wrong word, 'during' should be 'doing'}

my fair share of research I found out that obtaining a Doctor of Philosophy in History requires a lot of hard work and intense disciplining

{'disciplining' should be 'discipline'}

. Most individuals that obtain their doctorate degree started early as early as middle school at achieving their goal.

{ This is a completely clueless statement. People in middle school don't think about a doctorate and if they do they have no clue what it is. What is true is that sometimes people in middle school become very interested in a field, like history or biology or geology and that this interest then leads them to pursue an education which eventually leads them into an academic career. }

An informal name for this is often referred to as a " blue print." I'm quite sure my " blue print" is similar to many individuals who have obtained and plan on obtaining a doctorate degree. My blue print is very elaborated but for the sake of average individuals I will put it in laymen's term.

{ Good luck.}

e.

Constance Said:

Does anyone know what this dream means?

We Answered:

Too long a dream! Maybe you need to sleep more than 24 hours to complete the dream cycle!

Virginia Said:

Planning a bike trip... any advice from seasoned goers?

We Answered:

Don't worry,. be happy. but don't take the Colorado trip. The altitude, the hills and bad roads are not for unseasoned tourists without a tour guide.

Added: You wont be acclimated to the altitude, but Sis will be- avoid the mountains.

Wisconsin is my favorite, Ohio/KY good, New 'England roads are very nice too, but why waste the time and money traveling when you could be biking?

For a really great risk free trip, research going on someone's existing two week tour.

I am an ex tour guide, and here are the keys:

Train, get a bike that fits WELL, take light weight equipment, and practice with local rides.

So bundle up and start with the test rides. Join a bike club. ride, workout, lift weights, AT LEAST ONCE a week. consider using a bike to run errands or go to work. bike at least a little if it is over 55F degrees.

You Will be healthier too.

Before you leave for the trip you should be able to do one 40 mile day on moderate terrain with a light load. If you start riding now, that will be very achievable FOR THIS SUMMER!! (with one weeks practice, you can do a 12 mile ride on a good bike)

It will work out fine and be one of the adventures of your life.

I led trips in the mid 1970's and still it was one of the best times of my life.

Added Info:

There are quite a few fit adjustments on a bike, they of course start with "standover height" then is seat height, crank arm length, top tube length, handlebars- type, height and distance, seat angle and distance, brake lever location, to name many of them.

(Guys of the same height have porportionally longer bodies and shorter legs than a female, so you have to take this into account on bike fit, especially if the pwerson fitting you does not have a mastery of this.)

A professional at a bike shop can guide you thru this, hopefully a female tourist about your size. Call the shops to see if they have a female on staff. (dont worry about the seat, we all swap around till we find the most comfy one)

Might also call your local bike club and see if they can help; they are usually more than happy to get some one started right. They will also be quite helpful with riding technique and training. good group of people to find friends, too; not just riding buddies.

Another way to go is to buy a used bike to learn what you like and dont like, then buy your touring bike at the end of the summer when you know what you want much better