Rick Said:

pls read a real rough draft of story?

We Answered:

Never let anyone talk you out of a storyline you're passionate about. All stories have been done before and there's nothing wrong with yours. I will advise you not to write from the First Person perspective, however; it just won't work. Your actions scenes will always be watered down because the main character is obviously remembering them so the reader will know in advance that they survived. Also you will end up with endless pages of text describing what the character is thinking, a sure-fire way to bore a reader into a coma.

Your story starts out dull and lifeless; you need to begin with action. Jump straight into the story and don't worry about describing things. Important details can be introduced later through flashbacks and conversations. You don't need to explain everything; just what is necessary to advance a scene. Remember to 'show not tell' your story. In other words don't tell us your character drove into a tree; show us and allow the readers to experience the action along with the character.

Keep writing.

Jaime Said:

What are some good names 4 a smack talking profile for my school?

We Answered:

Smack-Head!

Wilma Said:

what is a good style i want to go punk rock but i dont know what should i do?

We Answered:

well listen to bands like Jimmy eat world. Sum 42. stuff like that.

Shop at pacsun sometime rue 21 has some stuff there. if you really wanna go punk go to hottopic.

get a crazy punkstyle hair.

I hope this helps.

goodluck

Anna Said:

What can I do to make my boy-friend notice me more.. Like comment about me.. say he loves me in person! :) plz?

We Answered:

relationships rnt supposed to happen wen u r only like 11! seriously. comon 14 and maybe 13 but little kids dont know the meaning of a relationship. u dont know love unless it comes from ur parents. dont worry about this stuff yet. if he says he luvs u... accept it. ur too yung anyway. sorry. thats just how i feel. but im sure u r beautiful. and im sure he loves u alot. u will learn this: there is not explanation for love (:

Beverly Said:

Cursing or swearing in Young Adult novels...?

We Answered:

Well, "Go Ask Alice" has cursing in it, and a lot of talk about drugs and some sex, so they will most likely not allow it. I remember reading "The Wave" in my 8th grade English class. I don't remember much about it, but I think it would be okay. "Night" I also read in 8th grade, so that one might also be okay. Although, I went to a regular public school... Sorry I couldn't be of more help.