Albert Said:

What does it mean to get kissed by your crush in your dream?

We Answered:

First, don't use "like" in every sentence. It sounds bad enough when spoken, and does not need to be written. Plus, it is just a dream. Don't take it to seriously. Finally, try to structure your argument or story better, so that people will actually be inclined to read it...

Freddie Said:

How does in tackle a problem with ADD and concentration problems in school?

We Answered:

I was the same way and to some extent still am. I never took medication and wouldn't want to. Math can be brutal and I found that I learned better on my own anyway so spacing out in class didn't hold me back. I would say as long as you can make yourself focus if you have to you'll be fine without meds.

Veronica Said:

How is this story so far?

We Answered:

I thought it was pretty good :) I got that she was self obsessed by the way she was talking about herself. The story line was interesting, although it did remind me somewhat of "Before I Fall"
Good job though, I loved how you told the story :)

Oh but there was one little mistake

You said "She never really drunk alcohol before....."
"she had never really drank alcohol before" is correct :) sorry, I'm a grammer natzi but when I see one I call it. (Although I dont see em much cause i pretty much suck at grammer..)

Will you answer mine please? thanks :D
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;…

Rodney Said:

Any tips for middle school?

We Answered:

Enjoy it while you can. I just left 8th grade this year and am going into my freshman year in high school. I wasn't exactly the social type either, but I had a great time. Make it last :)

Marlene Said:

Is this story good so far? Be as brutally honest as you can be!!!?

We Answered:

so, I'm just going to type up a list of stuff you could improve on:
well, for one, I'm not sure that "emerald-brown" is a good way to describe one's eyes...just what exactly is "emerald-brown"? Try using another way to describe her eye color...and you don't need to say, "her TWO emerald-brown eyes" it will be assumed that she has two eyes, unless you specifically state otherwise...
also, it seems like you are trying to describe to many things in these paragraphs...
eg: "Lyndon B. Johnson Middle School in Ash Springs, Nevada", "Emily Jasmine", " 59 Leigh Boulevard"...you don't need to give us all this information at once, you can spread it throughout the story....
ummmm....try to using other words besides "cascade", "garbled" and "prancing"...
"So, Emily figured, it was never a bad idea to do some innocent listening-in-on." "listening-in-on" sounds kinda awkward, try using different wording...
you don't need to use as many adjectives...
eg: "calm, serene room"...you could just say something like, "as she walked into her room, she felt calm immediately, her room always made her feel serene"
a question: why would an eighth-grader already be worried about getting a job? just wondering.
you shouldn't say, "whines and cries and moans" just use two of the words, three is too much...
also, you're kinda switching verb tenses, that makes the story hard to read...
you don't need as many details as you have in, it takes away from the actually story...
also, you should put a little more emphasis on what her stepmother is hiding, because this is probably what the story is going to revolve around, am I correct?
you don't need to say "metaphorically"
"So she knocked again. Quietly and quickly" I understand that you are trying to create a pause between "So she knocked again" and "Quietly and quickly", but "Quietly and quickly" isn't a full sentence....
one other thing, the sounds that the objects are making:
1. rocks don't go "boom", at least not rocks that you can kick...try using another sound for it....
2. "ch." I know that that is what a breaking pencil sounds like, but you don't need to describe it...

but other that that stuff, it's a pretty good begining to a story...