Virginia Said:

HELP!!! I cant find my school supply list. for 7th grade for fairview middle school in kentucky?

We Answered:

go 2 the skool and get one or just guess wat to get for skool

Sherry Said:

luanguage quiz.?

We Answered:

1. change don't to doesn't
2. run one sentance
3. change done to did and forgets to forgot
4. speaked to spoke, thierselves to themselves
5. nothing to anything, too to two (that sounds wierd)
6. hangs to hung, last week should be after the bill of rights

I think that is it unless you are counting capitals and periods.

Clearly I have no life. :-)

Harvey Said:

Do you like my story i'm writing?

We Answered:

it's pretty good for 12, but there are quite a few problems with it.

1. mistakes in spelling and grammar. if you want your story to be taken seriously, then you should try to use a spell check and make sure your tenses are right. i noticed a couple of times that you use present tense when you shouldn't and vice versa for past tense.

2. the speech is unrealistic. real people, or at least any i've ever met, don't usually talk like that. "I'm Abigail Whitmyer and I rule this school" It may be because you're not in high school yet, but no one in their right mind would ever say that. try to work on writing things that a real person would actually say in a conversation. I had this problem too when I was about your age but with a little practice, it'll get better. also, make sure that the dialogue stays in character. don't write things that one of the characters wouldn't say.

3. the characters are very underdeveloped. we don't know very much about Jazelle at this point and we should because not only is she the main character, but you've introduced a lot of other characters. you should write more about her to give the readers an image of her. one of the things that makes a story appealing is being able to connect with the characters, and readers can't connect with characters who they don't know. you introduce multiple characters but you barely describe any of them.

4. put a little more into it. basically, this just seems like a description of events. when you use first person, you have the advantage of showing the character's thoughts and feelings but you're not really using that as much as you should. it goes back to the thing about underdeveloped characters, provide the readers with a description of the setting, the characters, and general thoughts and feelings. events go pretty quickly in your story, so don't just briefly write about them but give them a purpose, you know what I mean?

all in all, the steps go together to create a great writing. the most important part is probably developing your characters fully because that's really where it all starts. don't worry though, i thought it was good for a 12 year old. and one last tip, talk to someone about what high school is really like so it seems more authentic. a lot of middle schoolers have really skewed visions of high school so just make sure you know what you're talking about.

Jaime Said:

Correct these simple sentences?

We Answered:

1. In my study, you will find a map of Europe on the wall but it doesn't have colors to show political divisions.

2. I sold one fourth of my merchandise to Ms. J. Coster; she lives at 1039 Mercer Rd in Fairview, Utah, where my parents live.

3. Last night, Tomas did his social studies homework, but he forgot to take it to Pinewood Middle School.

4. Ms. Gruber spoke well of the repairs the girls did in this garage.

5. The librarian hasn't said anything about choosing among the two rooms for the video tape collection, Teresa.

6. On the bulletin board in our history classroom, Ms. Jacobi, our teacher, hung a copy of the Bill of Rights last week.


WOW!! I'm a junior in college and still find the correct placement of commas difficult. Great question!!