Marion Said:

I did this paper and looked over it can somoene check it again for me?

We Answered:

Put a period after "age" in your first sentence--begin another senticence with "rich" and a comma after "corrupt." Spell out "first;" Insert a semicolon after "building". Put a period after "themes" and begin a new sentence.
2nd paragraph: I assume the commas before the next words are just typos in asking the question.
Next-to-last paragraph: Period after Rhod Island. Begin new sentence with Volunteers (And, why did you change from past to present tense--shouldn't you be consistent?)
Which would probably have changed the world as we know it--I'm not sure what your "which" refers to. And, women before sufferage did not have to "wear cloth over there [you mean their] faces"--so it doesn't make sense to say they would have had to if sufferage had nto taken place. The next sentence, beginning with Chilcren my age--it's a fragment, not a complete sentence. Finally should have a comma afater it. poising--you probably mean poisoning. Your last sentence--was should be were. "If there were"
Please don't feel, so many corrections--just make them before you turn in the paper, and your teacher will be impressed.

Edward Said:

Do my characters seem well-developed?

We Answered:

They're very well thought out. I really don't know what else to say. :P