Ruben Said:

Do you know?

We Answered:

ohh i do.

Ashley Said:

what do you think of my story?

We Answered:

Let's see...
-"She had a superstitious look that Heather and Jenna knew way too well." The only problem I have with this sentence is the 'way too well' part. Change it to 'far too well.'
-The part where Jenna gives that long speech about how her friends should stop fighting was... unbelievable. (Unbelievable in the sense that it wouldn't really happen that way.) Do you not think that the girls would argue? Example of what it should be:
"Why can’t you two get along? So what if she put glue on your chair in 6th grade, Heather? Ok, so I have to admit, that was mean, but-" Jessie began.
"Exactly!" Jenna cut in.
"No, friends are supposed to forgive each-other," Jessie sighed. Heather let out a snort of amusement.
"You're wasting your breath, Jessie! Jenna is too thick headed to apologize!"
*Something like that to give life to the characters.*
-I was surprisingly not as choppy as I expected. The description were good, but there is far more than hair and eye color.
-You described the old lady too quickly. Was is a 'lumbering, dark figure?' Maybe 'the old woman's face was twisted with a chilling, crooked smile.'
Overall score: Needs some work.
Rate 1-10: 6
Good Luck!

Angela Said:

Anyone ever have a teacher who got off topic every class?

We Answered:

yeahhh he
it was awesomeee
x

Tyler Said:

Hiya I'm Ellie Swanson, im a 17 year old girl that is really needs a middle name! Please help! XoX?

We Answered:

Ellie Marie
Ellie Addison*
Ellie Rachel
Ellie Victoria*
Ellie Nicole
Ellie Elizabeth*
Ellie Jennifer

* i love the most