Gabriel Said:

please proof my essay?

We Answered:

Just like in all and most essay you should have an introduction sentence, followed by three reason, and ends with why they are valid. You 2nd, 3rd and 4th paragragh should start with one of the three reasons you listed in your first paragraph. each one of those reason need three supporting reason and an ending validating sentence. In you thesis or conclusion statement your last paragraph it should either some up what you have just said in three short sentence and if it is a thesis, you opinion of what you just wrote about!

Eileen Said:

Do I have any chance of becoming a doctor, given my circumstances?

We Answered:

The mathematical courses in college move so quickly you will not have time to worry about retaining the information. Believe me if you have come this far, you can make it through the next challenges in your life.......relax!

Steven Said:

i need help writing a personal statement for a university?

We Answered:

Please do not think I am being mean here, I am trying to help you:

number of struggles at times where the situation seemed
Time is not a where, time is a when.. in which would be better

graduating high school at the early
graduating FROM high school

early age of sixteen
in college writing only numbers below nine are written out, unless they are the first word in a sentence. Use 16

that gave me a headstart in school
head start

and I felt to try was pointless
felt is considered a cliche' term in college writing. try believe or think

things just wouldn't work out for me.
college writing is about being clear and concise. Take out for me.

end up getting poor grades
"getting" is informal english. Try end up with poor grade, or something like that.

help me get the grades
avoid get or any form of it

try over and over to get me to
double wording is effective in speech giving, not in writing.

that after having all the troubles
"having" is a really vague term.

I still felt as if everything
again, take out felt

When things got hard
do not use got. Maybe, when things were difficult (better word then hard). comma after hard

graduation party, a great friend
"great" is very over used, vague, and subject to misinterpretation. For all I know, you mean a large friend of yours.

doesn't matter how smart you are
are you writing about the person reading this, or about yourself? If you want to make this general, try ...it doesn't matter how smart one is, etc

I'm making an effort
never use contradictions in academic writing

Writing a clear and concise letter will help yours to stand out.

Theresa Said:

Can anyone help me find a specific series of English/Language Arts books?

We Answered:

wow... you have a great memory... but i am pretty sure that you aren't going to get any answers!

Byron Said:

i'm writing a high school 5 paragraph essay...?

We Answered:

The layout for a five paragraph essay is:
Introduction. This begins with your thesis statement and outlines what you are going to prove with your essay.
Para 2,3,4
This is the body of your essay. In nice, logical order, you make your points here. You might want to talk about the well rounded student, who has time to take dance lessons, do band, belong to an art group, or talk about the too-well-rounded student who needs time to get in more physical activity, or the athlete who needs time to train. You can also mention quality family time, rather than bolting dinner and heading for your room to hit the books.
Para 5.
This is your concluding paragraph, where you weave the major points you made in paras 2,3 and 4, and conclude with a restating of your thesis statement. In effect you are saying, "There, because of all the previous information, I have proved my point (in this case, your thesis) and I rest my case."

Wesley Said:

Help on my college essay?

We Answered:

I redid it for you... Matthew in college professors like there students to use less commas and more periods. I worked on it for you. You need some more adjustments but for the most part I did most of it for you.

PS if you like it email me and I can send it to you in word format


Raymond

Walking through the front doors of my middle school felt like I was entering a new and different world. I didn’t have many friends, and everything felt strange and awkward. The Classes were much larger oceans of students flowing through the halls are only a glimpse of the changing surroundings at my new middle school. I didn’t welcome the change, instantly felt alienated by my peers.
Friends come and go. Brennan, my best friend from elementary school moved during the summer and pretty much left me to fend for myself. My friends from 5th grade were spread through out campus in different classes. It seemed like everyone from the other schools already knew each other, I felt out of place. I left home that morning with this sick feeling in my stomach dreading the thought of going to school again. These obstacles would diminish during the year with the acquisition of new friends.
I felt extremely alienated during that first day of classes with very few friends to talk to. I did not like change but I did like to welcome new friends. One person does come to mind. This person did something amazing during the first day of school; he went up to me and said “hi”. I still remember that day very vividly as if it was yesterday. That introduction was the highlight of my day. This very person has changed my life and has given me a whole new perspective towards my new school and what I call a friend.
I’ve had many friends during my childhood and teenage years, but changing schools and moving to different places has caused me to lose and gain several friends, often whom I’ve called “best” friends. The name Raymond comes to mind. This defines what I consider to be a best friend for me? Certainly I’ve called many people those two words. Raymond stuck out from all the rest. Raymond made me smile, laugh, and cry during those tough years. Instantaneously from the first time I met him he had me crying from laughter. He also shares my interests, watches the same shows as I do, and laughs at the same jokes, dislike/like the same people, we even work out together.
Everyone needs a Raymond, a person who you can share everything with. A friend who knows you inside out, who you aren’t afraid to tell him you’re inner most thoughts, who consoles you in times of need, which makes you smile inside every time you talk, who pretty much is a part of who you are. This person defines a true friendship, perhaps even something much deeper. The countless sleepovers, parties, late night conversations, movies, inside jokes, and all these thoughts are embedded as my best memories. Not once since that fateful morning has our differences or disagreements been a hindrance to our friendship. He’s a part of my world that I can hardly imagine being without.
This friendship is a true testament of time and friendship only now that we go to different schools and live in different cities have I realized and truly cherished how he has impacted my life. Even with the distance and not talking as often, our bond hasn’t weakened at all; in fact, it’s only grown stronger over time. He is and will be a constant force in my life, until the end my friend.