Shawn Said:

Can you guys check if this makes sense and it's good? :)?

We Answered:

I have capitalized any changes and I have further noted suggestions by way of parentheses
Good luck

Teenagers in today’s society have, to a great degree, the best and the worst of all times. First, Australian teenagers are born into a society that couldn’t be more innovative and revolutionary. They have all OF these gadgets at their disposal(no "s") that their parents ONLY DREAMED ABOUT and their grandparents could NEVER HAVE imagineD. TheRE IS AN incredible amount of information to aid their development. They also have (TAKE OUT word "more") opportunities galore to express themselves, to extenD their reach, to discover their potential and to enhance the QUALITY OF THEIR LIVES. BUT SUCH ATTRIBUTES ALSO HAVE THEIR ups-and-downs.

With the introduction to online gaming, many teens are becoming video gaming addicts and are immensely exposed to A misleading and wreaking media.

MALE TEENAGERS ARE DRAWN TO THE VIOLENT NATURE OF MILITARY COMBAT GAMES. SOME, UNABLE TO DISTINGUISH THE 'GAME' FROM REALITY, ARE CONVINCED THAT THEY THEMSELVES ARE UNBEATABLE; THE WORLD'S NEXT SUPER HERO (I didn't get the meaning of your next sentence, so I e-wrote it, above) The leisure of video games draws many male teenagers’ minds into thinking they are unbeatable and they withhold a super hero feeling especially from the likely cause of military combat games.---- The introduction to games such as car(S) delete "s") racing influence some teens in Australia to think that racing incredible fast cars is ‘cool’ and THAT they can drive insanely without getting into any CRASHING in real life. So they have a desire to go out and try it for themselves, unaware OF A DISTINCT POSSIBILITY THAT THERE MAY BE TERRIFYING CONSEQUENCES

Teenagers can simply name any clothing brand, shoe brand, a magazine, a celebrity, a movie or a video game. Everyday, teenagers of all ages are largely influenced by the media. I believe, teenagers especially females are prone to pay more attention to the media than adults. I BELIEVE THIS causes teenagers to be more judgmental and they can therefore scrutinize others for not being the ‘same’. As teens go through (TAKE OUT THE WORD "OUT")adolescence (take out word "years"), they start to create social groups or they join groups WITHIN WHICH they feel associated or comfortable with. Unfortunately, for the individuals who are left out or don’t seem to fit in, THEY are more likely to be bullied or (TAKE out word "well") considered as the ‘unpopular kids’ in the eyes of other Australian teenagers. I also believe society’s constant media exposure also forces a majority of teens into a stereotype that causes them (including myself) to be treated with no respect or dignity.

Many generations of people believe that all teenagers are lazy in Australia. BUT I BELIEVE A GOOD NUMBER OF teenagers are not AT ALL lazy in any form. TEENS COMPETE FOR TOP GRADes, to earn subject awards, honour roll DISTINCITION, scholarships and entrances to universities and colleges. They know schooling is A top priority and stress themselves in order to obtain any form of achievement.

Kathleen Said:

has anyone heard of ASG, Australian Scholorships Group? or used it? ?

We Answered:

yes, my mum has been putting money into that since i was about 2. now im 17 and i get it back next year so i dont have to work while going to uni. its really good and will be very helpful. it is popular and lots of people i know use it.

Luis Said:

If my country has no diplomatic ties with Israel, is it still possible to study there?

We Answered:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Indonesia%E…
http://infoscholarship.net/scholarships/…

1) Israel is a western country - they accept many foreign students should be no problem there.
Indonesia should not have problems accepting degrees from Israel - but discrimination will probably occur (my guess). since Indonesia is not a western country. Should you choose to live in Indonesia after getting a degree... If you choose to live elsewhere (western countries) Israeli degree will be appreciated more. If you want to open your own business... where you get degree should not matter.

2) Scholarships you need to search - look at the link. If you rely on scholarship 100% i would broaden my horizons by looking at other Universities

3) don't know -- find with university. Common sense tells me that Israel will pay better than Indonesia. Better Research opportunity, less corruption...

4) "A higher priority for me right now should be starting my career", "would working in Israel while studying a master's degree there give me a boost to later get better jobs or start a good business in Indonesia?" Better jobs opportunity is a function of (connections/networking, education, experience, luck, timing). Business is a function of (capitalization/money/investment, good idea, experience, timing, location, luck, education) -- education does not hurt in business but is a less of a factor.

Personal life? it depends on both of you. He said it is fine. You want to focus on your career. Seems like there is agreement for you to continue education.

getting education is short-term loss in terms of personal life but a long-term gain. If you can invest in yourself and get more education - you should go for it

Good luck.